story teaser for a quirky galactic migration game -- watcha think?

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  1. jun and pate

    jun and pate New Member

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    I'm nervously excited to show a little narrative teaser (first of a series) for Lilith Odyssey!

    Lilith Odyssey takes place in a quirky simulated galaxy filled with coded life. Frustrated aliens called Spu leave their home planets behind in hopes of finding a better existence on the other side of the galaxy. This is a peek into the struggle of a Spu who realizes that he’d rather risk everything on a dangerous journey than live a life of dismay and growing desolation. For his family's sake...

    I would love to hear about your impressions!

     
  2. DarkGran

    DarkGran New Member

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    Hi,
    It starts interesting by mentioning the simulation, but then it kinda omits the question "what the reality is" and instead focuses on what is happening inside of simulation - if I understood it right. With the details about how the society inside simulation functions it actually became a bit more confusing - I am not sure if it's necessary to mention the carelessness of government while the viewer is still getting his head around the simulation idea while looking at weird art (weird in a good way though, that is for sure!).
    To me it did not even seem relevant - I am not sure I even understand the motivation of the protagonist, because as long as the entire universe that is shown and talked about is "just a simulation", then who cares about some planet in it, however miraculous it may be? Unless it is somewhat connected to "the real world" - but that really did not seem clear to me from the trailer. Maybe that's just me though.
    The mention of "nacho wars", as a joke out of the blue, was a bit surprising, did not see that coming (the trailer feels rather serious).

    I kinda like it and the strange artwork is cool, I'd just make some cuts to it.
     

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