[Feedback Request] Website revamped & product announcement.

[Musenik]

Please direct your browsers to the fabulous, new, exciting, but probably not orgasmic, website redesign! There you'll discover strange new things, and hopefully download some of them. Please let me know if you think this potpourri of offerings will entice more word of mouth.

http://www.mousechief.com/

Tomorrow, I begin converting my new game from prototype code into a foundation for a product worth shipping. I hope the wise and enthusiastic members here will post their opinions of the concept and description.

No, it's not another CineProse(tm) game... :-) One of our focus group members described it as '3 in 3' or 'Fool's Errand' wrapped up with more of an adventure game. That should be a good one-line description for the folks here.

May 'Dangerous High School Girls, in Trouble!' bless your dreams.

[mahlzeit]

It's the most fun you can have with teenaged girls, without getting arrested.
This should guarantee some sales. ;)

[Musenik]

It's the most fun you can have with teenaged girls, without getting arrested.This should guarantee some sales. ;)

You know, I've been thinking of replacing that tag-line. It's funny, but pretty cliche. I like the line used in the one page description:

"This is the game where good girls get better by being bad."

What do you think? (may Mae West forgive me)

[papillon]

Eh, I think that second line is too confusing - takes too much mental processing time/power to figure out what you're getting at. :) Whereas the bit about being arrested is quicker, funnier, and makes me curious enough to go check your website and see just WHAT you are up to... :)

[Musenik]

...the bit about being arrested is quicker, funnier, and makes me curious enough to go check your website and see just WHAT you are up to... :)

Fair enough. Ad copy is about attention, not great literary art.